User:Kevinmount/Educational technology/Carlahelou Peer Review

General info
(User: Kevinmount)
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Kevinmount/Educational
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Educational technology:
 * Educational technology:
 * Educational technology:

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead

In my opinion, the lead needs some work. The introduction should be brief but to the point. The introduction written is too long and overwhelming and focuses just on the definition of education technology. My thought is that the lead should contain the primary objectives about the article. Another key point I have noticed is the transition of the introduction. One minute you are reading the definition while the next minute you are reading about the EdTech industry. Fixing this transition while engage the readers from the start.

Content

I like how you added the information regarding Chat GPT to the section, "Artificial Intelligence." Perhaps, you can add some examples of schools that actually banned the tool and then reversed the ban? Are there any recent studies or claims about this?

The tone of articles seems to be pretty neutral. The article provides a lot of information and facts without sounding bias. In terms of balance, the article does a great job with covering different parts of educational technology, including the definition and foundations of it.

Sources and References

The sources are all over the place in regards to timing. I did notice that there are sources from 2020, which is fairly recent. I noticed you added some sources in your sandbox. Was there any particular reason you picked those? Did they help you back up your content about ChatGPT?

Did you find that some sources are not reliable?

The section, Computer-aided assessment, doesn't have any citations. Would you add a citation to that section?

Organization

Although, the article is split by coherent sections, I think it can be organized a little better. The article is very detailed. Is there a way it can be organized to help the article flow smoothly.

Images and Media

The article does a great job portraying the images and they do adhere to Wikipedia's copyright information. You edited the section, "Artificial Intelligence", would you add an image to that section? Do you think the images will engage the readers a little more, while reading this article?

Overall impressions

Overall, this article has so much information and visuality may help readers like myself stay engaged. Incorporating information, like chatGpt and possibly adding more content about virtually learning during COVID and the studies that were done may make the article powerful. Adding, information readers can relate to can help them understand what they are reading better. Personally, I am going to go back to my own article and add current information that will engage my readers even more. Great work so far and happy editing!