User:Kexinma/The Mermaid (2016 film)/Aierz Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

The username is Kexinma.

The wiki project is The Mermaid (2016 film).


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Kexinma/The_Mermaid_%282016_film%29?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * The Mermaid (2016 film)

Evaluate the drafted changes
In the Bibliography, they should delete the reference link that they are not using.

For their references, they all do not have a wokring link. Since they are reference a review for the movie, they should be able to find a working link.

Also in the sandbox, they are refrence other wiki page, and they are missing link as well. Do remeber link the wiki page to the name in your article as well. Right now they don't.

As a draft they do have many detailed and useful information. Considering breking down the first paragraph into different sections. Theya re having too many different information in just one paragraph. And some of the infromation are already in the current wiki page. Like at the 7th line where they are talking about markting, in the current wiki page they already have the "Stephen Chow was on a 20-city tour in China to promote The Mermaid, including many fan meetings. "

Maybe read through the current wiki page to see if there are more repeat information.