User:Keyiw5/Koyah/Zachary Wang114514 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Keyiw5


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Keyiw5/Koyah?preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Lead
Guiding questions:

Q: Does the Lead include an introductory sentence that concisely and clearly describes the article's topic?

A: The Lead does include an introductory sentence that concisely and clearly describes the article's topic: Koyah, a ranking chief of the Kunghit-Haidas, the southernmost division of the Queen Charlotte Islands Haidas.

Q: Is the Lead concise or is it overly detailed?

A: The Lead is concise and to the point, providing essential information about Koyah's role as a ranking chief without being overly detailed.

Content
Guiding questions:

Q: Is the content added relevant to the topic?

A: The content added is relevant to the topic of Koyah, as it provides information about the fur trade at Red-Cod-Island-Town and Koyah's involvement in it. The content is not up-to-date as it pertains to events that took place in the late 18th century.

Tone and Balance
Guiding questions:

Q: Is the content added neutral?

A: The content added appears to be presented in a neutral manner and does not heavily bias toward a particular position. However, some of the language used, such as "Kendrick's behavior was a violation, so Koyah seek a revenge," could be interpreted as taking a position against Kendrick's actions.

Q: Does the content added attempt to persuade the reader in favor of one position or away from another?

A: The content added does not attempt to persuade the reader in favor of one position or away from another, but rather presents the events and actions of Koyah during the fur trade era in a factual manner.

Sources and References
Guiding questions:

Q: Is all new content backed up by a reliable secondary source of information?

A: The content added is backed up by only one reliable secondary source of information, which is cited in the text. The source cited is the Canadian Encyclopedia, which is a well-respected and reliable source of information on Canadian topics. Although the source is reliable, it's not enough to fill out the content with only one source. Here's a suggestion, you can search some key words like "Kunghit-Haidas", an island relate to Koyah, to find more sources about Koyah.

Organization
Guiding questions:

Q: Is the content added well-written - i.e. Is it concise, clear, and easy to read?

A: The content has some clarity issues and lacks proper organization. The first paragraph jumps from discussing the peaceful beginning of the fur trade to Kendrick's behavior, and then Koyah's revenge. The second paragraph discusses Gray's visit and Koyah's loss of status before abruptly transitioning to Koyah's engagement in raiding and capturing ships. The final paragraph briefly mentions the fate of the tribe but does not provide a smooth conclusion to the previous events.

Images and Media
Guiding questions: If your peer added images or media

There's no image.

Examples of good feedback
A good article evaluation can take a number of forms. The most essential things are to clearly identify the biggest shortcomings, and provide specific guidance on how the article can be improved.


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