User:Kfreda/Weathering hypothesis/Laurencox1 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

(provide username) Rka77, Rani110, Kfreda


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Kfreda/Weathering hypothesis
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Weathering hypothesis

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

There is essentially nothing to the original article so it's good that you all are tackling this. The first thing i noticed was that all of the additional sentences are cited which is good. I like that you all added more to the origin i feel like it added more to round out some of the biases and the information that was lacking in the original piece. I feel like the additions of the new sections such as the race disparities and intersectionality sections work to round out how these all work into the Weathering hypothesis. The addition of criticisms was also good because it counteracts some of the potential biases that could be shown given the definition you're working with.

Overall, i think maybe beefing up some of the criticisms might be beneficial because it seems a bit short but otherwise everything looks good. I think all of the new information has sources after words and when i looked at a couple all of the links worked and the sources seem reliable and credible. The rhetoric you used as well was concise and well written so maybe just take a look at the criticism section and you're good to go!