User:Kgn.wht/Sally Ito/Luiza Coulaud Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

(provide username) Kgn.wht


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Draft:Kgn.wht/Sally Ito


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * n/a

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead -- (short and quick) straightforward and compressed lead section. provides an overview on the artist's life, and it works very successfully on keeping it a quick and understandable. maybe some different wording could improve the second sentence. (short and quick)

Article body -- the body expands on the information presented in the lead, which i'd say it's a good approach. doesn't feel complete quite yet.

Awards and honours -- maybe doing this section in a timeline, if there are links to the awards, maybe implement that as well :)

looking good so far!