User:Kgroft/Day Zero/GabrielleLohse Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Kgroft (Kay Groft)


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Kgroft/Day Zero
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Day Zero
 * Day Zero

Evaluate the drafted changes
Hi Kay,

It's great to see your progress so far, I think you have some great insights and information about "Day Zero". I see that you are working on the Wiki page for a dystopian fiction novel, which sounds like a great fit for this project. When I look at my dashboard and click "article" next to your peer review, I do appear to be sent to a Wiki page about a film titled "Day Zero". Is the movie based on a book that you are adding to the original page? Or perhaps they are unrelated and Wikipedia just really wants me to watch that movie! I focused my notes on your Sandbox draft regarding the novel.

I appreciated that the lead section introduces the author and some logistical information like page numbers etc. you mentioned that the novel itself is a prequel to "Sea of Rust", that might be a good opportunity to include a link to the Wikipedia page to that book if it exists, this could creative a more cohesive space for readers to check out the rest of the series without having to look it up on their own.

It is super interesting to see a work of post-apocalyptic fiction published during our current pandemic. I think that if you choose to expand your Wiki draft even more, you could include a section about the historical context of the novel. Even though it doesn't necessarily feel like history right now, I think that connecting the novel to its cultural environment at the time of publishing could be an interesting addition.

I also want to note that your plot summary felt effective and concise. I have often found writing plot summaries to be particularly difficult, finding that balance between relaying information without being too vague or too specific (spoilers). There is a line in your Lead section that reads "The plot centers around a young boy, Ezra, being protected by a robot, Pounce, as they make their way through the post-apocalyptic world." I think that this line would also work well as the opening to the Plot portion of the article, if you choose to move that over and then focus the Lead on some other aspects of the novel. You also mentioned philosophy in the plot; in your expansion of the draft, this could be an interesting area to find some more sources or articles which detail the philosophical aspects of the novel.

Overall, I felt your draft to be concise and clear. You've done a great job at capturing the most important aspects of the novel, and showcasing that information in a professional and well-organized manner. I look forward to seeing the final draft of this Wiki page, good luck!

Gabrielle Lohse