User:KhaleesiArya/Cultural sensitivity/EtherealPink Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

KhaleesiArya


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:KhaleesiArya/Cultural_sensitivity?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Cultural sensitivity

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead


 * Strong introductory sentence to the lead that gives a simple definition of cultural sensitivity
 * Great use of linking to other Wikipedia articles for readers to gain a better understand
 * Can be more concise (ex. removing the sentence, "Cultural diversity includes demographic factors (such as race, gender, and age) as well as values and cultural norms." as this can be included in the sub-sections

Content


 * The content added to the "In the dominant culture," section is a good choice as it gives readers a better understanding of cultural sensitivity
 * Content is up-to-date with recent sources cited
 * The section titled "Working and traveling abroad," could be more concise and added to the "In the dominant culture," section as it relates to one another

Tone and Balance


 * Remains neutral, does not persuade readers to think one way

Sources and References


 * Good variety of current sources
 * Relates to content well and helps provide examples for better understanding of the concept

Overall Impressions


 * The content added supports the sub-section of "In the dominant culture," well
 * Strong list of sources to retrieve information from relating to the topic
 * Content can be improved by shortening the "Models," section to make it easily digestible to readers
 * Great organization template for the content that is easy to navigate