User:KhaleesiStarkGaryen/Simple living/Edfc1902 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

KhaleesiStarkGaryen


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:KhaleesiStarkGaryen/Simple_living?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Simple living
 * Simple living

Evaluate the drafted changes

 * The lead section has not yet been improved.
 * I think that the content added to the article, especially in the Simplifying diet section as there is not much information about it in the original Wikipedia article.
 * The content is up-to date.
 * The tone and balance of the article is similar to the original, but the new writing has a better job in explaining the theme, althoguh it could have some more concise language in my opinion.
 * The sources are credible and all the links are working, all the content is supported by the sources
 * The sources reflect the available literature on the topic, but there is still room to find new sources and keep improving the article.
 * The new writing is more clear, but could be more concise
 * The content added does not have any gramatical errors and is well-organized, using the structure of the orginal article