User:KhaleesiStarkGaryen/Simple living/Shav21 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

KhaleesiStarkGaryen


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:KhaleesiStarkGaryen/Simple_living?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Simple living

Evaluate the drafted changes
I liked the revision of the "Simplifying Diet" section the most. I feel that the information added was notable enough for inclusion, and that the additional content provided a more detailed view into what a simplified diet really is. As for the "Reconsidering Technology" section, I liked some of the changes made. I feel that some information in the original article was a bit redundant, and I think the revised version is cleaner. However, I do think that some of the reworded content was a bit harder to comprehend than the way it was laid out in the original article. Overall, I think the revised article is an improvement from the original.