User:Khiya04/Clostridium perfringens/Nina717 Peer Review

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Khiya04, Microb3 Mans, Oblivious2
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 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:Khiya04/Clostridium perfringens
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 * Clostridium perfringens:

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In section 1: "increase a cells permeability" change to "increase a cell' s permeability"


 * Alpha toxin:
 * "all throughout the environment" -> sounds casual. might be a good idea to change wording here.
 * "This toxin is linked to gas gangrene of humans and animals" -> specify what gas gangrene is. is it a disease?
 * Beta toxin:
 * "hemorrhagic necrotizing enteritis and enterotoxaemia" -> it may be beneficial to describe what these are
 * Epsilon toxin:
 * "but cattle are sometime susceptible to it as well" -> change to "but cattle are sometime s susceptible to it as well"
 * "A experiment using mice found that ETX" -> change to "A n experiment using mice found that ETX"
 * LD50 of 50-110 ng/kg -> what is LD50?
 * This causes the destruction of the cells cytoskeleton which in turn leads to the death of the cell as it can no longer maintain homeostasis -> this sentence seems a bit like a run-on. maybe try and make it more concise or split into 2 sentences.