User:Khiya04/Clostridium perfringens/Supergirl02 Peer Review

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Clostridium perfringens
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 * User:Khiya04/Clostridium perfringens
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 * Clostridium perfringens

Evaluate the drafted changes
Major Toxins:

I wonder if the verbiage "intoxicated" is the correct word to use in the first paragraph. Its definition is to be under the influence of drugs or alcohol. Potentially use the word "infected by" or "Coming in contact with...".

I wonder if you could link the Wikipedia page for some of the diseases the toxins cause. For example, linking enterotoxaemia for the epsilon toxin so readers can click to read more about it.

Genome Section:

It could be beneficial to explain the significance of a stable G+C content. Since the first paragraph appears to be heavy in wording and links. I would potentially only link the topics that may be more difficult to comprehend such as G+C content but not bacteria or genomic.

In the second paragraph, the word "genetic" is spelled incorrectly, as well as "pathogenesis".

In the third, potentially explain the significance of this microbe developing antibiotic resistance, if new drugs have been created to combat it, and potentially how it was found to have develop this resistance.

Motility Section:

I believe that the bacterial name can be italicized throughout the article. Also, after you refer to it once in a paragraph, you can refer to it as C. perfringens after that. I would also go through and do a grammar check to make sure everything has the correct punctation. For example, the first sentence of the second paragraph should read "On agar plates, colonies with hypermobile variations, like SM101, frequently occur around their borders."

Other than grammar, I really like the paragraph on hyper-motility. It made sense; I think it just needs some fine tuning.

References Section:

I noticed that two of the articles are from greater than 10 years ago. There was one from 2009 and one from 2012. I know in class, Dr. Walker asked us to stay around 10 years ago. I wonder if there is more recent research that still supports your claims to meet that requirement.

Altogether, you guys have some good information here. Remember to have an opening paragraph that summarizes the whole page as well. It would not be a bad idea to go through and make sure each section is synchronized in terms of grammar. There were some sections that did not have the microbe italicized, whereas others did. I think as you guys add to it, it will come together nicely as well, as more information for each section is added.