User:Khyamamoto/'Ulu Maika/Kiarapech Peer Review

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Khyamamoto
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 * User:Khyamamoto/'Ulu Maika
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Lead
The lead section is really good. To a reader who only wants to know what the game is, the lead contains all the information necessary for a reader to understand the premise of the game. You described this as a game enjoyed "among islanders." To me this means Hawaiians on all islands. Is this true? Or is there a specific island where it concentrates?

Content
The content is really understandable and nicely organized. Because the article touches on the history and the contemporary game, it touches on various time periods, which is necessary for the article. I noticed a gap in the history section that could be filled. You can mention when women started playing the game, since you mentioned that the game "was exclusive to men." You could also touch on the specific gameplay difference between the past and the present. This sentence specifically is confusing to me: "Kahua maika were large areas of compacted ground, some of which were excavated and shaped for special challenges functions, like having curves or funneling stray stones." I think it's the wording of the sentence. I know what you are trying to say, but someone else may not. Additionally, mentioning what the game added to the Hawaiian culture prior to it being destroyed my colonization may also be helpful.

Tone and Balance
The content is neutral. There is nothing that could be perceived as biased as there aren't opinions on the game mentioned. Were there opinions on the game? It may be helpful to mention them.

Sources and References
Understandably, the sources range from hundreds of years ago to now. That is an appropriate time range. I was able to click on your references and they all seem trustworthy. islandscene.com seems like a blog, but I am not sure. I like that many of your sentences have multiple sources for what they say. It's clear that you have various viewpoints for this article.

Organization
I think that the content is well-written. It's clear that you are describing the game and are simply sharing information and not trying to build an argument. One thing that confuses me is the heading/subheading formatting. I understand that it's labeled as your draft, but you don't need that label. As a result of that heading, your formatting may become confusing towards the end when you create the final article. This was a point of confusion for the other article I reviewed as well, but you don't need to manually put your title as the heading because it will be automatically done. With that I am saying to change your subheadings to be your headings so that they are appropriately organized. Aside from that, the formatting is perfect.

Images and Media
Your image was really appropriate, both in content and placement. The inclusion of the image made the article easier to comprehend. I suggest adding gameplay images too. Images of the kahua maika may also be helpful to help readers better understand the context of the gameplay.

New article
This is definitely an article that deserves to be on Wikipedia. It seems very notable and is formatted like other articles. I wish there was more linking to other Wikipedia articles, but I could not find related Wikipedia articles. Props to you for adding something completely new to Wikipedia!

Overall impressions
This is an interesting article about a topic that deserves to be on Wikipedia. The content seems complete and honestly could be enough for an audience's general understanding of the game. However, I know that this article will become so much more informative. Great work!