User:Kiara2005/User:Kiara2005/sandbox/Contehis Peer Review

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Kiara
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Lead In
She did a good job at separating her information into individual pieces each with their own source. I was impressed by the information, she had lots of numbers and stats which is really good. There aren't any changes that are really needed the article is strong, all I would say is add more information for treatment if that's possible. It would just even out the article because all the other parts have a good amount of information and the treatment looks like it lacks information. I noticed I should add a lot more numbers and statistics in my article.

Lead Section
Yes the lead makes it very clear what the article is about. Yes, the lead is the definition so, it explains the topic and the rest of the article further explains the lead. No, the lead is balanced.

Structure
Yes, the order she put them in all make sense, she starts with the definition and then leads to it's affects in men and women in colleges and treatments. Each section's length is equal to it's importance but the treatment section seems like it lacks information kind of. Yes the article reflects all the perspectives. No the article doesn't try to draw conclusions or convince the reader of anything.

Neutral Content
No, I can't guess the perspective the author did well at keeping the strictly informative. Yes, in the end she says " People who suffer from (BDD) usually seek physical help when they should actually be getting mental help " it's not bad, but if the goal is to stay neutral the words "when they should" sounds convincing. The article does not make claims on anyone behalf. The article is neutral the information doesn't try to sway in a negative or positive light.

Reliable Sources
Yes, all the statements are connected to sources. No, all the pieces with lots of information have at least 2 sources. No, there aren't any unsourced statements.

Reviewer Reflection
The three changes I will make will be keeping my tone neutral in my article, having more statistics and numbers within it to support my sources, and I will fix my punctuation.