User:KiateKat/Dura Europos' "Brothel"/Cc3339 Peer Review

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 * Whose work are you reviewing?

KiateKat


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 * User:KiateKat/Dura Europos' "Brothel"
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Evaluate the drafted changes
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Lead
-Unfinished sentence at end. I included a little section about its discovery to beef up my article, maybe this could be useful if you have the excavation report.

-"brothel is a part" not apart

-Def cite the second sentence about the workplace - using diff page citations from the same source is helpful!

Description
-Again, it'd be good to cite every few sentances-ish, even it it's the same source, it will be more reliable

-You say "several other factors" maybe elaborate on them in the following sentence then get more in detain about the architecture - several is pretty broad.

-Maybe define or link dipinti.

-Def more citations after the Zeugma bit and in that paragraph - I think every paragraph should have at least 1 citation.

-Maybe the Discourse of Naming section should be up here, or above the Aphrodite relief - seems to make more sense sequentially.

Relief of Aphrodite
-I think there were 4 reliefs found - Downey said so in Stone + Plaster Sculpture I can send you the page if you want.

-Anne said I should talk more about why we think it was made with a mold - so you could def do that too!

-Maybe mention why Dura was a place of "mixed cultures" - poss cite that other religious stuff was found everywhere

Discourse of Naming
-Def cite this + possibly move to Description?

-I think earlier you said that there was erotic graffiti, but here you say there's a lack of it - also mention why it's clear that prostitutes worked here.