User:Kiianamariiee/Brain size/Acl370 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Kiianamariiee


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Kiianamariiee/Brain_size?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Brain size

Evaluate the drafted changes
No drafted changes were listed on the Sandbox Draft. Below is a review with suggestions for the current version of the article.

The article is well cited, primarily with peer-reviewed scientific journals. Nearly every claim has a valid citation. The content is overall clear and concise. Each section is relatively neutral, and contains information relevant to the subject.

I have three critiques:


 * 1) The article heavily focuses on human brain size, to the point where one may consider renaming the article "Human Brain Size".
 * 2) While the sections have a good sequential order, I would move the section "Cranial capacity" to the top of the article (after the introductory paragraph, before the "Humans" section); this would give a bit more background and clarity when referencing cranial capacity throughout the rest of the article.
 * 3) The long quote at the end of the "Biogeographic variation" section needs to be summarized and said in the Wikipedia author's own words.  It is a bit too long for an encyclopedia entry.