User:Kingwhale16/Rungano Nyoni/Soldejaneiro Peer Review

Peer review
Hello Kingwhale16,

Your page on Rungano Nyoni is very well done. You used many fields to provide a lot of detailed information about Nyoni, with great sourcing to support each claim. It is amazing how many details you were able to find about her, from the meaning of her name to the material she used to shoot her movies. I love the tables that you included that demonstrate her contributions to each film as well as awards won, respectively. Try to maybe re-word the 'notes' as the majority just say short/short film, this is a great place where you could add extra details or interesting information about either the film or nomination.

I don't see anything wrong with your sources either, it's good to use news articles as they are a great unbiased source of information.

My biggest suggestion to you would be your grammar and punctuation as well as to be careful for run on sentences, I liked the wording you used - you are evidently a very strong writer! However, at times, some of the sentences were difficult to read, such as "Nyoni often collaborates with her partner Gabriel Gauchet and in 2012 a film directed by Gauchet and written by Nyoni, The Mass of Men, premiered at the Locarno Film Festival, where it won the Golden Leopard Award". You could instead separate this into two sentences and implicate more grammar, for example; "Nyoni often collaborates with her partner, Gabriel Gauchet. In 2012, a film directed by Gauchet and written by Nyoni, The Mass of Men, premiered at the Locarno Film Festival, where it won the Golden Leopard Award." In many of your sentences, a comma or dividing the fragment into two sentences would make the content smoother and easier to read. Try reading your text out loud to see if it sounds comfortable. This will help you edit out any run-on sentences or sentences missing commas.

Other than that, great content! You were able to provide a lot of key information about your filmmaker and really do her legacy justice. Great work!