User:KiraXMaddox/Cardamom Mountain Jar Burial Sites/Sarpayton Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

KiraXMaddox


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:KiraXMaddox/Cardamom_Mountain_Jar_Burial_Sites?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Cardamom Mountains

Evaluate the drafted changes
This page is very detailed and the content is straightforward. I think the lead could use some more work but that may not be necessary because this topic has an existing page so that may not be pressing, but besides that everything else is organized well and I like the sections you choose to do. It helps create an easy to read page, helpful to find topics like the different sites, maybe add a bit more to those subsections. Why they are important or what has been focused on at each one? The burial content sections are very in depth and allow a lot of information that is clear, concise and neutral. I feel like the page is not biased and provides only facts without being opinionated. The writing is to the point and makes sense. Having six references is great and you seem to site them throughout the page showing where you got evidence for the information. I think adding a map of where these sites are in comparison to one another could be good to add, strengthening the page with more information and making it look nice too. The article flows nicely and ultimately I think you did a really good job explaining these sites, I would just suggest adding more information to the first few sections. But I really enjoyed the last section that went over the ongoing archeological efforts.