User:Kirsten.bures/Dominance (genetics)/Am2314 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Kirsten.bures


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Kirsten.bures/Dominance_%28genetics%29?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Dominance (genetics)

Evaluate the drafted changes
I would suggest moving the first bolded sentence either to the beginning of the section or deleting it. It seems weird to say there is a few misconceptions in the middle of the section. I would considered rewording the last sentence to "Any experienced biologist knows that these ideas are not factual but might be confusing to a beginner." Another suggestion might be trying to separate the sentences you add throughout the section to allow it to flow better. If possible, I would explain why something is a misconception instead of just listing them or how it can be addressed. I do think the added misconceptions are useful and should be included in this section. It is great that you were able to add a source to this section as well.

This was not in the section you added, but I might consider changing the word "deleterious" as it was a word I had to look up. However, this might be a word common in genetics and might be the best word to use.

I liked adding the Huntington's disease and Marfan syndrome information because the other two sections had a real-life example. I think a picture might be useful in this section because I am little confused based on the definition.

Overall, the paper is written from a neutral perspective and the majority of the information has sources. I think the information added improved the article and is written in a way that is typically easy to read, but I have added some suggestions for rewording and the organization of the sentences.