User:Kjb1818/Deafness in the Dominican Republic/Organism438 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

KJB1818


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Kjb1818/Deafness in the Dominican Republic
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
-Lead: No lead has been added.

-Content: Doesn't seem like the article is polished yet there is minimal information in Deaf empowerment. The article is lacking a language emergence section. The information does have citations. There should be more information regarding the last 2 groups in deaf empowerment. The information provided is very informative. Human rights section I think can have an introduction to the CRPD and the world federation of the deaf and then go into the individual details of the articles. Overall the articles and the details are pretty good. The bullet points just need to be added together into paragraphs and polished. Under language deprivation there is a citation in the middle of the word Dominican that needs to be corrected. The citations in the sentences should be at the end of the sentence.

-Sources: sources all seem good some are "missing or empty" where it says cite web. The links are valid and provide the information that is in the wiki page.

Overall the information that is already in the page is good and informative. The article just needs some polishing and a final edit and published out of the sandbox. There also should be a language emergence section and then citations should be fixed in the sentences.