User:Kjhrdt/Thomas Bradwardine/LeeLaiben Peer Review

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 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Kjhrdt


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 * Editing User:Kjhrdt/Thomas Bradwardine - Wikipedia
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Evaluate the drafted changes
Okay, this article has some good information in it, your references are strong, and you make solid connections to other fields as well as how Bradwardine's work impacted contemporary science. Most of my notes are either structural or grammatical. In the first sentence of the Early Life section, you need to add an apostrophe so that it's "Brandarwine's." I also might rephrase "The first concrete sources of his do not appear until" as these would be sources about him, not sources by him. I would definitely expand on the Scientific Studies section, as it sounds interesting. How did he try to reconcile contradictions in physics? What were the contradictions? Maybe your section about inspiration to others could be integrated into the legacy section or vice versa? They seem to cover much of the same material.

Response To Peer Review
I will change most of that, in most of my other writing works my main issue is typically structural or grammar, so I can see that as main problem of mine. Expanding it into the legacy section would be a better choice than giving it its very own section in the Wiki article which would just make it harder to understand the reading itself. So to sum it up, restructure and go over my grammar, and reorganize those sections of the article.