User:Kjp001/Lemon Bars/Kbae67 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

-Kjp001


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Kjp001/Lemon Bars
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * -Doesn't exist

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Lead:


 * The lead does include information about what the article will be about.
 * It doesn't exactly give a brief description of the main sections that will come in the article, but the lead itself is concise with explaining that lemon bars also go by another name, are a dessert bar, and the usual ingredients in a lemon bar.
 * There is no information in the lead that isn't give later on the article, but the article is not finished yet.
 * The lead is concise and not overly detailed.

Content:


 * The content of what is in the draft right now is related to the topic.
 * For all the sources that had publication dates, they were all in the 2019-2021 range so they are up-to-date.
 * There is content missing, but this is a draft that has not been completed yet. I'm interested to learn more about the origin and history of lemon bars! The information that is there is all relevant and has a purpose for being there.

Tone and Balance:


 * The majority of the content appears neutral, however in the lead the phrase "popular" might be considered to be biased, but I'm not 100% sure. That's something we as new Wikipedia editors should look into. Also the words "many prefer" used in the ingredients section is pointing to an unnamed group which could be seen as bias.
 * The information in the sections that are in the draft right now is balanced.
 * The information does not try to persuade the reader in any direction.

Sources and References:


 * The majority of the sources used so far are all from food cooking websites, which provide a brief description, the ingredients, and the recipe instructions for lemon bars.
 * The article does accurately describe what is in the sources.
 * The sources are current, which is great.
 * The sources aren't incredibly diverse given that most of the creators appear to be white, but it's hard to tell ethnicity just by the few images that are given. If you wanted to add more diverse information, it could be interesting to look into the ways that other cultures make lemon bars, if they do since other cultures might not even have lemon bars.
 * The links provided work.

Organization:


 * The content is well written and in a good presented organization of the sections. Putting the origin and history section first after the lead will provide good background and lead the way into how lemon bars are traditionally made in today's world.
 * I'm not perfect with grammar, but the sentence "Lemon Bars, as well as many other dessert bars are typically..." in the baking section has a grammatical error. Since a comma is placed after "lemon bars" a comma should go after "dessert bars" for the reading of the sentence to flow better.

Images and Media:


 * There are no images.

For new articles only:


 * The draft does have 2-3 reliable sources.
 * There aren't very many sources listed, so it's not totally comprehensive, but given that the draft is still in the works, I think there's potential for more sources. Try looking at reviews of lemon bars, maybe.
 * Dessert bars is linked in a "See also" section.

Overall impressions:


 * The content in this draft is on the right track! I find it hard to believe that there isn't already a Wikipedia page on lemon bars since there's usually a Wikipedia page for everything.
 * The strengths are the lead being concise, the sections being organized in a great and understandable way, and the overall neutrality of the information
 * Improvements that can be made are fixing the grammar error in the baking section, maybe adding a few more sources that are different from recipe blogs and posts, and adding images.