User:KlicketyKlack/Damocles/Random2187 Peer Review

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KlicketyKlack's article on Damocles


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 * User:KlicketyKlack/Damocles


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 * Damocles

Lead
No changes to the lead at time of review except to add the location of Damocles. This is fine as the lead seems sounds, perhaps you could add the time frame Damocles lived to flesh out the template header some more?

Content
The added content seems helpful though it may be helpful to separate the 'Differing Interpretations' and 'Use in Culture, Art, and Literature' as their own sections rather than sub-sections under 'Sword of Damocles.' I look forward to the expansion on interpretations of Damocles and the sword. It feels like there is very little about Damocles himself but I understand there just may not be that much information on him. Since you are expanding and giving examples of the Sword of Damocles in popular media you might want to add a reference to the Shackles of Damocles from Jim Butchers' The Dresden Files: Storm Front, I saw there was a debate as to whether it should be added on the articles talk page but I believe it is sufficiently relevant with the new article content, and many people will likely come to this page in search of the background behind the shackles.

Tone and Balance
The tone of the article is very neutral, even when going into conflicting theories about the meaning behind the Sword of Damocles in 'Differing Interpretations.'

Sources and References
The article is well backed by sources, both already existing and those added. I would say 'Differing Interpretations' should be expanded to include more theories but it seems you are already aware.

Organization
The order of the sections is good and provides a natural flow. Some of the vocabulary used seems needlessly complex such as 'obsequious courier' in the header, and some of the phrasing of the article is awkward such as 'Though having much fortune' in the main body. It may be worth going through and making minor rewrites to the language used. I would also suggest reformatting 'Use in culture, art, and literature' into a bulleted list to make the individual examples stand out more from each other and improve readability.

Images and Media
I like the use of images and the ones added seem helpful and insightful for readers. Perhaps you could add some images from the Sword of Damocles depiction in the Atari game, or of the VR headset.

Overall
I think the additions to the article so far are very beneficial and significantly expand upon the original article. This must have been difficult considering references to Damocles only come from one or two ancient Greek sources and I'm impressed with how well the article has been fleshed out.