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1. New Section: "Accomplishments"

As the United States government expected, the scientist that they brought in had found success that benefited the nation:

Wernher von Braun: While working on the Saturn V launch vehicle, which would eventually be used to allow for mankind to reach the moon, he also acted as the                                                                                  director of NASA's Marshall Space Flight Center. His work not only sent the first man into suborbital flight, but would send the first men to the moon.

Magnus von Braun: Younger brother to Wernher von Braun and assisted in the creation of the V-2 Rocket and other operations at NASA. His biggest contribution was making sure that the Russians didn't get the V-2 rocket program.

Adolf Busemann: Created the swept wing, which allowed planes to fly at supersonic speeds.

OR (Fitting in with Wikipedia norms)

While acting as the director of NASA'S Marshall Space flight center, Dr. Wernher von Braun also assisted in leading the team that worked on the Saturn V launch vehicle. This would end up being the key instrument in getting man first into suborbital flight and then reaching the moon.

Dr. Magnus von Braun was the younger brother to Dr. Wernher von Braun. He assisted his older brother in researching and creating the V-2 Rocket. His biggest contribution was making sure that the Russians didn't get the V-2 rocket program.

Adolf Busemann was the mind behind the swept wing, which allowed planes to fly at supersonic spees.

2. 2nd paragraph In the entire article

With the Cold War being apparent, the United States government wanted to come up with a plan to stay ahead of the U.S.S.R. As this race for scientific superiority continued, Operation Paperclip was born. On the other side of the war, the Russians came up with Operation Osoaviakhm. This order allowed the Russians to extract German scientists, both peacefully and by force, some with all of their belongings and then bring them into Russia, usually in terrible conditions. Both plans went into effect in order to help the individual nations thrive post-WWII.

3, "Controversy and investigations" Edit to the last paragraph

After being implicated with a human experimentation investigation his reputation fell under scrutiny. Even though he was never formally charged and he denied knowing about the experiments, there is a widespread belief that he contributed to these experiments. It was only after his death where people began to let his past over-shadow his personal accomplishments.

Analysis of Article

 * 1) Not everything written is relevant. The entire article is suppose to be about Operation Paperclip, but it goes into extra information that really isn't necessary about what the Nazi's did with their scientist and doctors after failing to break through the U.S.S.R.
 * 2) This article seems to be neutral, but may have some bias. Even though it is based on a controversial topic, the article is still history, so everything that happened should be in here. The only problem is that when people write about history, it is extremely difficult for some people to write without any biases.
 * 3) The viewpoints seem to not be all represented. There is a request at the top that explains this potential error and asks for editing.
 * 4) The article makes indents like it wants to quote something, but their isn't any article or information that corresponds with it after. At some points, the article makes a statement and their is no citation right after it. They are pushed to the end of the section, not just the paragraph, and this makes it seem like the author didn't use a source for that type of information. For at least one source, it points towards an encyclopedia but doesn't provide a link to anything, only the title and the page numbers. Even though this is a book source, there isn't any ISBN, so finding that exact source may prove difficult. Also, some of these sources date back to the 60's, so the age may interfere with the information. Finally, there are some areas where a citation is needed and there is a request for one.
 * 5) The sources themselves seem to be neutral for the most part. Some of them though, should not have been used and better sources could have been found. n example is that their is a source from the BBC, which is a main-stream media with a known liberal bias and political agenda.
 * 6) A lot of the sources are extremely old and if researched, could be updated. The article could add more information about Operation Paperclip
 * 7) The talk page focus on needing more references
 * 8) This article is rated c-class and, for the most part, seems to be of high-importance.
 * 9) The topic on Wikipedia is extremely straight forward with almost no room for a writer to interpret the facts. Ideally, the information is categorized and put out to the world for the reader to interpret and understand.

Edits that can be made for the article:

 * 1) In the Talk section, someone brings up the point that they can add in the contributions of the scientists. A new section can be added in and it can be potentially named "Outcomes of Operation Paperclips".
 * 2) In the second paragraph, a citation is needed and better wording can be done.
 * 3) In the section "Capture and detention", a portion could be added and reworded.