User:Kmbesant/1982 Lake Waco murders/Mmae101 Peer Review

General info
Kmbesant
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Kmbesant/1982 Lake Waco murders
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * 1982 Lake Waco murders:

Evaluate the drafted changes
Your draft doesn't seem to have any biased language and has lots of detail. I'm sure you're still working on adding your sources to the draft, but just remember that if you're using multiple sentences for one source, make sure the reader can clearly tell that the information in those sentences is from that source.

The other thing I would suggest is just double-check your grammar before submitting it. For example, in your sentence, "The police officer, patrol seargent Truman Simons found Franks' body under a large tree propped up against the stump, with sunglasses over his eyes, he had been stabbed multiple times," the last part of that sentence should either be a separate sentence or replace the comma with a semicolon.

Other than that, you have a very good draft.