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Article evaluation

The article has many grammatical errors it was a bit difficult for me to follow in just the first couple paragraphs. There were some sentence constructs. There were a couple things that distracted me and that included the sections modern usage and secondary school. They could have possibly been grouped together or formatted in a way where the transition from the two was much smoother. The modern-day usage include examples from secondary education uses so the comparison of before use of the term "liberal arts" and today could have been compared better. Some of the paragraphs are a bit underdeveloped and lack some information that could be suitable for the topic. It seems to be a bit repetitive with the information. Countries with similar ways of referring to the term "liberal arts could have been group together and a better connection of the term and its countries would have been good. Overall, the article is neutral it gave many factual points of the meaning of the term liberal arts and how it is interpreted in many ways to countries, history, and modern day. The source links did take me to another page, but there were a lot of sources from University publishes. Which could contain some bias. overall the sources looked good and there were some external ins that could use some editing but good. After reading the talk page some of the other users had some similar concerns as I did with the confusion of reading some of the sections. Some of the editors on the talk age stated that the term was incorrectly used in some ways and was not legible in its information about other countries. For example, in the section where the article discusses the term "liberal art" in other countries one of the editors stated that the article had an incorrect fact about the UK and its use of the term liberal arts. Also, the distinction between liberal education and liberal arts education. It does overall, have a good structure with headings and bolding and the tone of the article is not in the first person.

Article Selection

Social influence

The article from the beginning followed an organized structure. The article pointed out social influence and its definition not only that, but the few also, many interpretations and psychological aspects. I will say that for the opening of the article it gave a broad amount of information that could be hard for learners who are not familiar with the psychological aspects of social media to follow. The article seem more of an informative piece and it was right to structure. I do think that some real-life examples of social influence would have given the content more of a push into modern day influence. Overall, the article was neutral and very factually using many philosophers and terminology. There were reliable sources such as New York Times. The "talk" section only included markings about a modification of an external link. There was overall no bias and clean structure to the article.

Influence of mass media

First look at the article I am seeing a clear and bolded structure throughout the text and easy to read sections. The first sentence of the article is unclear it has many sentence constructs and can be broken down into 2 sentences. The repetitive uses of media is making it a bit difficult for me to get the point of the first sentence. In the third paragraph there are many things that were a bit confusing. I was unsure if the writer was using the authors first names or last names to give their interpretations of mass media. Again the repetitive uses of media and mass were overwhelming. There seems to be more detail in sections versus others. With such a broad topic there could be more development of the topics and terminology used in the article. For example, in the media violence section under the micro-level media effects title there was a development of the behavioral effects of social media, but not so much a development of the cognitive effects. Overall, the sub-sections did improve the visibility and organization of the the influences of mass media. The "talk" stated that there was not enough sources or statistics to back up some of the information provided in the article. Also, there were many critiques on bias within the article that did not have supported citations. It contained information from sources, but not much independent research on the topic. Most of the external sources were scholarly sources which seem to b e without much bias and factual information.

Social media

There was a confusing jump in the intro paragraph from the different social media programs/websites to the amount of time users are using social media and the amount of time they are on these different sites. For example in the sentence it stated the different types of social media and the transition went straight to the user and screen time. A smoother transition would have made the topic more steady in the intro, but overall good intro to the topic and clear understanding. There were positives and negatives of social media, in the sentences that were discussing the negatives there was a pinpoint on cyberbullying. Although that is a big negative influence of social media it is not the only one depression was mentioned, but not responded on as much as cyberbullying. A more focused article would increase sufficiency of the topic of social media is broad and there is so much to be covered. The article was written not written in the first person and contained an abundant amount of sources. Although this is true there may be some biases throughout the article seeing as the sources come from some biased accounts. In the talk section it referenced some of these bias and also the confusing in the sections. Also, sections that can be added to increase the format of the article and its content. I overall think that this article could be more specific there are so many topics being put under the classification of social media that can be further explain under a specified title. For example, in the article there is a section that discusses business commerce and social media within this realm, but it is within the uses of social media that makes it a bit difficult and a big transition for some readers. I would edit this is make it its own section so that there is a clearly understanding and transition.

Intro Paragraph:

I would have added more about the about the different social media programs and then added the statistics of the amount of time users are on social media with the negative effects paragraph that was right after it. Or used that as its own paragraph titled: "User time on social media" this will help to condense some of the information within the article because the topic social media and extremely broad.

Negatives/Positives paragraph:

Pinpointing more than just cyberbullying as an effect of social media there are many known negatives of social media and more information about these will help to make more of a clear statement to the readers and help with the sufficiency of the article and given information from its sources. The positives and negative section comes right after the intro paragraph it would fit better within the actually content of the article towards the end after more information is given within the article about the history and classification or the author could be split within the article in a strategically way where the positives are named within subheadings after the classification and defining paragraph. The negatives are named under the subheading that are already given within the article violence in media and negatives of media. I believe that negatives and positives should be split up and put with correlating topics within the article.

Social Media Usage Paragraph:

The couple of sentences used towards the beginning of the article could be added in the social media usage paragraph to have some correlation.

"Over 60% of 13 to 17-year-olds have at least one profile on social media, with many spending more than two hours per day on social networking sites. According to Nielsen, Internet users continue to spend more time on social media sites than on any other type of site. At the same time, the total time spent on social media sites in the U.S. across PCs as well as on mobile devices increased by 99 percent to 121 billion minutes in July 2012, compared to 66 billion minutes in July 2011. For content contributors, the benefits of participating in social media have gone beyond simply social sharing to building a reputation and bringing in career opportunities and monetary income." (Add to the social media usage paragraph)

Article Evaluation (Final)
Social Media:

After adding the final edits and rereading through the article there is more clear and concise flow of the sections and paragraphs. There were few grammatical errors in the sections. I edited the sections that combined that intro paragraph and usage and added the usage paragraph to the the usage section. That added a more clear and complete flow to the first section of the article. The organization of the article is good with transitioning through the various topics under the umbrella term social media.. The content and the balance is good there is a nice flow between each heading and section. There is an abundant amount of details within each section that helps to increase the reader's knowledge of social media. There are many aspects that are mentioned throughout the article that give more emphasis on the topic and how it has affected society in many different ways. I do still believe that a more focused article about the different subheadings relating to social media will help to help with structuring and organization and a clearer concept, but it is still organized in a way where it captures the whole picture of the effects of social media.