User:Kmd43p/Caterina Sforza/Miguel Nunez 1119 Peer Review

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 * User:Kmd43p/Caterina Sforza
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 * Caterina Sforza:
 * Caterina Sforza:

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I like the choice on expanding her work on alchemy for the article, but something that seemed off to me was the second and sixth sentence, for they essentially stated the exact same thing. Something that I think could be useful to add is the addition of information for motivation. I understand that she had a thirst for knowledge, and that according to the ideas you had in the sandbox, she was inspired to learn due to her political concerns as a former regent of a territory. Another thing that might be interesting to see added is how was she introduced to alchemy, as in if she was exposed to people doing alchemical work during her time as a ruler.