User:Kmubeen/Swahili coast/Jasminrw Peer Review

Peer review
User:Kmubeen

User:Kmubeen/Swahili coast

Hi!

Wow! This article draft has many great improvements going towards the original article. I think that the lead has been expanded perfectly based off the amount of content being added within the body of the article. The range of sources in this article allow the article to be even stronger, and are easy to follow when referencing. The set up of the Table of contents and image are a professional touch to the organization of the article. Some readers may have difficulty knowing where the draft begins and ends so the header reflecting where the note section starts is really helpful. The content within the draft remains fairly factual which allows most of the content to remain neutral, however some of the content may persuade the reader. One example is under the Coins section it states "On the Swahili coast, coin minting can be correlated to an increase in Indian Ocean trade. The earliest coins share many similarities to coins from Sindh. Some estimate that coins were minted on the Swahili coast as early as the mid 9th century until the end of the 15th century AD." this may do nicely with adding in a few more citations to support the claims. The article overall is greatly improved with the new additions and a lot of great information of a wide range is included which is really useful to anyone wanting to learn more about the Swahili Coast. Wonderful job!! (Jasminrw)