User:Kmv315/Neuroesthetics/Isamelia6 Peer Review

General info
Neuroaesthetics
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:https://en.wikipedia.org/w/index.php?title=User:Kmv315/Neuroesthetics&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template&veaction=edit&redirect=no
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):

Evaluate the drafted changes

 * 1) The biggest thing to change is just the organization. Suggest adding headers and subheaders that break up the text and make the page easier to navigate.
 * 2) not necessary but would be helpful to have some terms hyperlinked such as Fauvist Art or Lucio Fontana's cut canvases.  so people can easily find more relevant information and understand better
 * 3) Neuroaesthetics is a field of experimental science that aims to combine (neuro-)psychological research with aesthetics by investigating the "perception, production, and response to art, as well as interactions with objects and scenes that evoke an intense feeling, often of pleasure." --- Remove direct quotes and reword
 * 4) small change in wording, use "refers to" and "for example" several times, rewording might help it sound a little less repetitive in that sense
 * 5) Semir Zeki's laws of the visual brain Semir Zeki, professor of neuroasthetics at the University College of London, views art as an example of the variability of the brain --- want to try to refrain from referring to specific studies by name. Can refer to the content and cite, but you generally want to avoid describing the work/discussing the researchers in 3rd person if possible. I noticed this was also the case for some other studies you cited. Everything is well written, referenced, and relevant but this style doesn't quite fit Wikipedia's standards for using/citing work
 * 6) consider shifting the bottom two sections (Neuroarchitecture and Aesthetic triad) higher up. I feel like they give the reader good background of what you get into in more detail in your body paragraphs.