User:Knelsonfaith/National Day for Truth and Reconciliation/KittyJolee Peer Review

First off, just want to say congrats on getting started with this assignment. I had a lot of trouble deciding which one to work on.

However, I am struggling to see what contributions you have made that are substantially different from the main article. It feels like it's mainly rewording, and not really introducing new information on this topic. (At least in the beginning of your first section.)

"Following the Confederation in 1867, the newly formed Cabinet of Canada, including Prime Minister John A. Macdonald, assumed the responsibility of advising the Crown on the treaties signed with the First Nations of Canada. Macdonald, confronted with a nation of diverse cultures and identities, sought to create a unified Canadian identity to ensure the country's survival. His objective was to assimilate the First Nations into the broader Canadian population, effectively eradicating their unique cultures. In 1878, Macdonald commissioned Nicholas Flood Davin to investigate the residential school systems in the United States. Davin's report, delivered a year later, concluded that residential schools were the only means to separate Indigenous children from their parents and culture, thereby facilitating their assimilation into the nation. He recommended that the government collaborate with Christian churches to establish these schools."

This reads as essentially the same thing as what the article said beforehand.

" Residential schools, which were government-sponsored religious institutions, were designed to assimilate Indigenous children into Euro-Canadian culture. These schools systematically undermined Indigenous cultures across Canada, disrupting families for generations, and contributing to a general loss of language and culture. The last residential school did not close until 1996, and many of today's Indigenous community leaders, teachers, parents, and grandparents are survivors of these schools"

This also doesn't seem to belong in this particular section. I believe it would make more sense in the Background section. But it doesn't seem like a substantial contribution.

"The National Day for Truth and Reconciliation, observed annually on September 30, honors the children who never returned home from residential schools, as well as the survivors, their families, and communities. This federal statutory holiday was created through legislative amendments made by Parliament and is a crucial part of the reconciliation process.[3] The day is also known as Orange Shirt Day, a grassroots commemorative day led by Indigenous communities to raise awareness of the individual, family, and community inter-generational impacts of residential schools."

Parts of this would probably belong in history of National Truth Day and the Truth and Reconciliation section, but this doesn't seem like a substantial enough addition to this article.

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