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=The Chrysanthemums=

=Proposed edits to Wikipedia's "The chrysanthemums" article for ENG1300=

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 * 1) expanded character list
 * 2) edited plot summary
 * 3) grammar
 * 4) symbolism
 * 5) theme
 * 6) setting
 * 7) punctuation
 * 8) reference

reading list

 * 1) Dickinson, Denise. John Steinbeck's "The Chrysanthemums": A Woman Bound By Society.
 * 2) Elizabeth Kassim, Symbolism in "The Chrysanthemums".
 * 3) Wingate, Emily. Elisa’s Unhappiness in “The Chrysanthemums”.
 * 4) Renner, Stanley. The Real Woman Inside the Fence in "The Chrysanthemums".
 * 5) Stanwood, Les. Flowers for Carol: John Steinbeck, Joseph Campbell and “The Chrysanthemums".
 * 6) Shillinglaw, Susan. Author Susan Shillinglaw’s John Steinbeck Journey.
 * 7) Osborne, William R. THE TEXTS OF STEINBECK'S "THE CHRYSANTHEMUMS.
 * 8) Mawatari, Mayuki. A Selected Bibliographical Checklist of John Stein beck's The Long Valley.

Original
Soon Elisa hears “a squeak of wheels and a plod of hoofs,” and a man drives up in an old wagon. (He is never named; the narrator calls him simply “the man.”) The man is large and dirty, and clearly used to being alone. He earns a meager living fixing pots and sharpening scissors and knives, traveling from San Diego, California, to Seattle, Washington, and back every year. The man chats and jokes with Elisa, who answers his bantering tone but has no work for him to do. When he presses for a small job, she becomes annoyed and tries to send him away

Revised
Promptly Elisa heeded, "a squeak of wheels and a plod of hoofs, and a man commutes up in a decrepit wagon. (The narrator simply calls him the man). The man is of broad structure and filthy ,and is clearly evident that he has been unaccompanied for sometime. He earns a meager living by commuting from San Diego, California to Seattle ,Washington , and back every year mending pots and sharpening scissors and knives. The man chats and jokes with Elisa , who is responsive to his bantering tone but has no work for him to do. Elisa shortly becomes annoyed and tires to send him away when he presses for a small job.

Original Characters

 * Elisa Allen -protagonist
 * Henry Allen -Elisa's Husband
 * the tinker -antagonist

Revised character list

 * Elisa Allen is the protagonist, she is a thirty-five-year-old woman hard worker, who feels trapped, underappreciated, and frustrated with life, it maybe for the longing of freedom, a childless life, the yarning to have kids, or simply her sexual frustration.
 * Henry Allen is Elisa's Husband. He is a kind businessman who runs his ranch successfully and provides a comfortable life for his wife. He loves his wife but doesn’t really understand and appreciate her.
 * The Tinker is the antagonist he is a tall, bearded man who makes his living repairing pots, pans, and other kitchen utensils. The tinker is a smart person and charming salesman.