User:Koafve/Shelling (fishing)/Keburt Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Koafve


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Koafve/Shelling_(fishing)?preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Shelling (fishing)

Evaluate the drafted changes
Peer review of Shelling (fishing) by user Keburt

Lead

Your lead section has greatly improved the article already. It is concise and highlights both what the behaviour is and in what species the behaviour is observed.

In the introduction you mentioned possibly including where it was observed. If you choose to include this, you may wish to consider putting in a separate, "History" section as the article lead section may get too bogged down with information if it is included in the opening paragraph. By putting it in a separate section, it distinguishes the history behind the observation of the behaviour from the general introduction to the behaviour.

As you noted you may include, the sentence explaining what vertical and non-vertical transmission is may be better suited for a separate section in the article called "Transmission" (or something like that). The lead section should not include any substantial information that isn't mentioned in the article itself. A section that explains the modes of transmission of this behaviour (that have been studied and proven) would be a great addition to the article and would help explain how this behaviour is acquired.

Content/Organization

I think tool-use should be mentioned in the article, as your topic (shelling) is a form of tool use in dolphins, but I do not think it needs to be a section by itself. The explanations of tool use in other animals is better suited for a separate Wikipedia article on its own, and going into another topic in depth in an article on a specific behaviour might lead the reader off topic.

As mentioned above, adding a section explaining the modes of transmission would benefit the reader and build a stronger article. You may wish to add the bits of information you've written on animals using similar modes of transmission into this same section, but I don't think it warrants a section of its own in this specific article.

Tone and Balance

You have a neutral tone throughout your additions to the article. You have presented the information in a fair and balanced light.

Sources/References

I'm glad you removed some of the sources that were not appropriate for a Wikipedia article, like the The New York Times article and the CNN video. These sources are not adequate for Wikipedia articles and removing them ensures the information presented in your article is not based on unreliable sources. You have a broad range of sources relative to the information you added and your sources are from scholarly journals, making the information you present better suited to Wikipedia's guidelines. Your reference links seem to work as well, so the reader can access the information you used to build the article. I had some difficulty finding sources on shelling/conching, so it may be difficult to add much more information than you already have.

Images/Media

If you are able to find an image that depicts shelling behaviour, I think it will help the reader understand what the behaviour looks like and it will make the article look more visually appealing. Although this would improve the article, you unfortunately may not be able to find an image that can be used on Wikipedia as it is not a common behaviour.

You picked an interesting topic and this is a cool behaviour that I did not know dolphins exhibited!