User:Koketso K. Masenya/Period poverty/Bamoateng Peer Review

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Koketso K. Masenya
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Koketso, your lead is really well-structured. I like that you added a part about the impacts of period poverty. I don't think that you should add statistics in the lead as that might bog it down. Maybe save the statistics for the body of the article. I feel like the last few sentences of your lead sounds a bit persuasive and so I'd suggest making it a bit more neutral.

One way to adjust the balance of your article is to use some sources that don't have the word "women" in them. I found some information on the NIH's website and the Journal of Global Health Reports about period poverty. (This is just a thought! Please take it with a grain of salt!)

I read the part where you detail what you plan to do with the article and i'm really interested to see the information you produce relating to transmen and period poverty. Just like you said, I think that the original article talks a lot about America. A section on how other nations are handling period poverty would be good.

Do you think it may be a good idea to highlight movements that have raised awareness on period poverty? I think that would be a good way to cover the history of period poverty and how it has become such a well-known issue.

Have you considered adding graphs or charts that show how prevalent and widespread period poverty is? I think that this would help to provide even more information on period poverty.

-Beatrice