User:Kosenrufu2030/User:Yk0302/Teddy Wilson/Doublebassplayerv Peer Review

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(Yko302)


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 * User:Yk0302/Teddy Wilson

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 * Teddy Wilson

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(Overall this draft is really well written and there isn't too much I can find. The article is really well organized and your sections are much more fleshed out than the current article. The "Music" header section I think could be renamed to something like "Musical Style" or "Musical Playing Style" . I also noticed a small grammatical error in your "Early Life" section with a capital "His" instead of lowercase. In the "mid 1930s to the mid 1940s" section I think the sentence "Wilson left his residency in Goodman's band and formed his fifteen-piece big band in 1939, but it only lasted around a year due to the lack of individuality in his band" might need to be followed with who said that there was a "lack of individuality". So if Teddy Wilson said that in a source you might include that the band did not last because "according to Wilson there was a lack of individuality". In the "Last Years" section the sentence "Throughout his late life, Wilson preserved his classic swing vocabulary rather accepting neither bebop nor fusion jazz" might work better if you omit the word "rather".)