User:Kosenrufu2030/User:Yk0302/Teddy Wilson/Kosenrufu2030 Peer Review

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 * Whose work are you reviewing?

User:Yk0302/Teddy Wilson


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Yk0302/Teddy Wilson


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Teddy Wilson

Evaluate the drafted changes
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Overall, this is a fantastic article. You added some interesting information, and you were able to flesh out much of his career. Kudos!

The new lead section is fine. I would be careful with the line, "sophisticated and elegant style" as that seems a bit subjective and not objective. There might be some objection to that line unless someone else quoted that particular line about Teddy Wilson.

Content is relevant and up-to-date. I love the sections you included in the article, and you were able to be detailed in your description of those specific years. I love the inclusion of his early childhood music activities including his formal training. Do you know if any of his recordings received specific honors and awards (Grammys, American Music Awards, etc)? You might be able to include some of that information in your article.

Tone is mostly neutral, however, there are a few lines that feel a bit subjective. This was apparent in the lead section - especially since there is no citation to the line and it was said by the original author. Also, you may get pushback on the notion that Wilson was one of the first "black musician to play in predominately white bands." I do not mind it but it may get some criticism as to why does that specific content matters.

You included great sources that are diverse and relevant to your content. The links also work.

Content is well-written with very little grammatical and spelling errors. It is also well-organized with the designated sections. Are you going to include the discography? Why did you take that section out? I think it might be good to leave as this is an important part of the article. Overall, fantastic job!