User:Kosenrufu2030/User:Yk0302/Teddy Wilson/Tofu98 Peer Review

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Yk0302


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 * User:Yk0302/Teddy Wilson


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 * Teddy Wilson

Evaluate the drafted changes
The addition of the sub titles under his career section is a good idea, however I think adding specific year ranges might be beneficial to adding credibility to the information provided as it is an encyclopedia entry. The tone does seem to shift between certain sections of the article.

I like the addition of the musical style section, perhaps calling it 'Musical Style' or 'Playing Style' instead of just 'Music' might let the reader know more about the content of the section.

The sentence "Throughout his late life, Wilson preserved his classic swing vocabulary rather accepting neither bebop nor fusion jazz." could be worded better. Perhaps "Wilson was known for maintaining his classic swing vocabulary throughout all of his life." or something along those lines. Perhaps the title "Last Years" could be changed to something more formal too. Perhaps Post 50's or Later Years instead of "Last Years".

I really like the information added in the musical style section. It adds a lot of context about his playing style, and helps readers that haven't heard his playing imagine how he sounds compared to other contemporary pianists.

Overall the information added and the structure added is very beneficial to the article. The only change I'd suggest would be to look at some of the syntax and tone of your additions when compared to the rest of the article so that it blends well together.

Looking forward to future edits!