User:Kovicoffee/Evaluate an Article

Which article are you evaluating?
The article that I am evaluating is the "Sleep Tracking" Wikipedia article.

Why you have chosen this article to evaluate?
I chose this Wikipedia article because I was interested in learning more about sleep tracking devices. Additionally, I recently started tracking my sleep using a mobile app, so I thought that what I would learn from editing this Wikipedia article could contribute to my understanding of sleep tracking in general as well as the utilization of mobile apps for sleep tracking. it is important to update this article because more people have started using their smart phones or smart watches to track their health activity, including their sleep activity. My current impression of the "Sleep Tracking" Wikipedia article is that it has a lot of room for additional contributions. It may benefit from more references to systematic reviews rather than news articles touting the benefits of sleep tracking.

Lead Section
The first sentence of the lead section does a good job at explaining what "sleep tracking" is. The following sentence also explains what a "sleep tracker" is. It does not include a summary of the article's major sections as there is only one major section - effectiveness. Rather, the lead section includes information that is not included in the rest of the article by focusing on further explaining the numerous types of sleep trackers and how the sleep trackers evaluate sleep data. The lead section is currently overly-detailed and may benefit from taking this additional information and putting it into its own section or split across multiple sections within the article.

Content
The content currently on the article is relevant and the current references are mostly up to date (with the oldest one being from 2015).

There is currently only one section on the "Sleep Tracking" article - Effectiveness. Within this section, quotes and recommendations are pulled from scientists, healthcare professionals, and sleep advisors regarding the benefits of sleep tracking. When determining the benefits or detractors of sleep tracking, it would make more sense to pull from findings of secondary sources like systematic reviews and not primary sources or news articles. Additionally, it would be beneficial to this Wikipedia article to include a few more sections - History of Sleep Tracking, How Sleep Tracking Works, and Types of Sleep Trackers. There are already Wikipedia articles on "Sleep Studies" and "Actigraphies," which are often referenced in systematic reviews and studies in general on the effectiveness of consumer sleep trackers, so we do not need to go into full detail regarding these prior to discussing the effectiveness of consumer sleep trackers.

I don't believe the topic relates to Wikipedia's equity gapes.

Tone and Balance
The article provides a balanced take on sleep tracking. It is neither super positive or negative about sleep tracking. I do believe someone who is quoted within the article that may have bias is the Sleep Advisor for Men's Health, Dr. W. Chris Winter. I'm not entirely sure what his credentials are, but it may be better to have recommendations be pulled from systematic reviews and not quotes directly from doctors, sleep advisors, and neurologists. It does not appear that any views are over or underrepresented. It does not appear that minority or fringe viewpoints were shared on the article and it does not try to sway the reader to one viewpoint or another.

Sources and References
Currently, most of the references and sources for this page are from digital articles from websites, magazines, and newspapers or journal articles, not secondary sources. This is primarily an issue for the Effectiveness section. I don't believe it covers the gamut of literature regarding sleep tracking because it does not go into detail the differences between sleep tracking devices and their results. It looks like most of the references currently on the page are male researchers, so it may be nice to, where possible, add contributions by female researchers as well. All the sources currently work.

Organization and Writing Quality
I don't personally think it is well-written and can use some updates. There are not enough sections within the article for the content that it includes and should include. There are some grammar mistakes within the article.

Images and Media
There is one image that is included that illustrates one of the ways a sleep tracker can look like (a Fitbit). I think that it was captioned well as it accurately and concisely labels what is inside the image. However, I don't think the caption needs a citation. It looks like an original image so it follows Wikipedia image guidelines. It is placed within the lead section, which is visually appealing.

Talk Page Discussion
It does not appear there is any conversation going on in the Talk Page. There was just a list of news articles and journal articles left behind to improve the page. It is a start-class article (Technology, Electronics, and Psychology) and a low-importance article (Electronics and Psychology). It does not appear to be in any WikiProject.

Overall Impressions
The article needs improvement. I think the article's strengths are that it already has a neutral take on sleep trackers. It has included both positive and negative perspectives on sleep tracking and sleep trackers, however, it does not go into depth. Additionally, I think it captures a lot of the basic information well. As mentioned earlier, this article needs more sections and some of the content included in the lead section can be moved into one or more separate sections. Additionally, the effectiveness section would benefit from systematic review findings. I think in its current state, it has hit the bare requirements to understand sleep trackers and sleep tracking but not the clinical benefits or hindrances of sleep trackers and sleep tracking.

Dr C's comments
Great work on this assessment! It looks like you've identified some great areas for improvement, including: (1) adding a summary of the main sections of the article to the lead; (2) Update citations to include more current secondary literature/peer reviewed sources; (3) Add one or more sections on History of Sleep Tracking, How Sleep Tracking Works, and Types of Sleep Trackers; (3) Moving some of the information from the lead to other sections; (4) Address the differences between sleep tracking devices and their results in the Effectiveness section. We can talk about how to prioritize on Thursday but you've got some great material to work with here.