User:Kpere039/Jake Shane/Bellabratchie Peer Review

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Kpere039
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Your draft provides a good overview of Jake Shane's life and career. Here are some suggestions for improvement


 * 1) Structure and Formatting: Ensure consistency in formatting and section headings. For example, the "Career" section could be divided into subheadings such as "Social Media Beginnings" and "Rise to Prominence on TikTok" to provide a clearer chronological progression of Shane's career.
 * 2) Expansion: Consider expanding on certain aspects of Shane's career or personal life. For instance, you could provide more details about specific TikTok videos that went viral or discuss any significant challenges or turning points in his career.
 * 3) Citations: Include citations for specific statements, especially those related to Shane's accomplishments and milestones. This adds credibility to the article and allows readers to verify the information.
 * 4) Neutral Tone: Maintain a neutral tone throughout the article, especially when discussing Shane's achievements or public image. Avoid using overly promotional language.
 * 5) Inclusion of Criticism: If available, include any notable criticism or controversies surrounding Shane, as this provides a balanced perspective of his public image.
 * 6) Proofreading: Double-check for grammatical errors, typos, and clarity of expression to ensure the readability of the article.

Overall, your draft is off to a good start. By refining the structure, providing more detailed information, and ensuring accuracy and neutrality, you can continue to create a well-rounded Wikipedia entry for Jake Shane.