User:Kporter0918/Breastfeeding/LessonsInSpencer Peer Review

Lead: The lead seems very detailed and provides a very concise explanation as to the practice of breastfeeding, the epidemiology, contraindications, as well as benefits and drawbacks.

Content: The content is relevant to the topic and up to date. See "Organization" for a few suggested changes.

Tone and Balance: The content seems to be more on the side of pro-breastfeeding than formula feeding. It may help to add some potential negatives of breastfeeding including: discomfort/pain that some women experience (cracked/sore nipples), potential interruptions with sleep/work schedule, father/partner may feel excluded due to inability to help feed the baby unless milk is pumped and saved for later.

Sources and References: Very thorough and numerous sources. Very impressive!

Organization:


 * Breastfeeding Physiology: It would be helpful to explain why Lactogenesis is divided into three stages and how this classification was determined in the lead paragraph in the section. I would also briefly define the first use of the term colostrum in the article so that laypersons understand what it means. The section on 'Lactogenesis III' seems unclear what separates it from 'Lactogenesis II'. Also, from my understanding pregnancy doesn't have to occur for breast-feeding to be possible (i.e. a wet nurse), so perhaps that can be mentioned.
 * Breast Milk: Great section. Foremilk and hindmilk, used in the image caption, could be defined in the section as it is unclear where they fit into this process.
 * Process: In one subsection, it states "as of October 2016". Since this was greater than 5 years ago, perhaps this can be updated with the current knowledge? Other than that, very detailed and elaborate section.
 * Contraindications to Breastfeeding: Similar to how substance use was made its own section, it might help with organized to place all the viral illnesses under a common section perhaps labeled "contagious viral illnesses" to illustrate similarities. Also, untreated TB is a contraindication.
 * Methods: Great subsection
 * Health Effects: Very thorough section.
 * Social Factors: Healthcare subsection could probably be moved elsewhere. Doesn't seem to belong.
 * Prevalence: Good section
 * History: some citations are needed
 * Society and Culture: For the language subsection, a citation is needed for that statement.
 * Workplace: Great discussion about US policies. May help to include a few other countries outside US and their position on breastfeeding in workplace.
 * Research: Good section; albeit brief.

Images and Media: No changes needed! Great amigos!

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