User:Krao01/Water supply and sanitation in Peru/TheAlexRodriguez Peer Review

Peer review
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General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing? Krao01
 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:Krao01/sandbox

Lead
I personally love the flow of your lead (the social access subsection) with the existing information provided in the article, but I would refrain from using essay language (if that makes sense?). You are using many transition words and making it seem like you are trying to have thesis. I personally love the information of your lead but I would recommend changing it a bit to sound more "encyclopedic". I can say the same thing about the subsection of Lobitos and EcoSwell and Sustainability.

Content
Content evaluation: Your content is very enriching and thought provoking! I loved the flow of the information you put (and even the additions to preexisting comments!). I loved the sustainability article and how it provokes the conversation of change and what Peru can do to tackle the issue of lack of water to certain communities. I also enjoyed reading the social access because it adds new light to the conversation of inequality of developing countries (and the conversation on who gets what, and why)

Tone and balance evaluation
The tone seemed very neutral! Once more, I would just suggest making it seem less essay-like.

Organization

 * My read of this article was easy to read and understand. You have such a great grasp of your research and it shows! Great additions as a whole and the organization of where you decided to place your information fits perfectly into the existing article.