User:Kratinaha/Elephant communication/Mmahmed1 Peer Review

The current article illustrates the Communication system in the Elephant. Overall the information presented here is relevant and interesting. However, an improvement could be achieved by adding some details and points.

1- It is clear that the authors did not include a lead section (it is too short), so it is reasonable to include more details relevant to this topic in a concise and comprehensive manner.

2- It seems also that the author did not cover the chemical signaling molecules responsible for the communication between elephants.

3- Article titles are not indicative. They are not well describing the intended reasons to be explained under these subheadings. So, I strongly recommend giving these titles more clarification to be easy for the readers.

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Kratinaha


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Kratinaha/Elephant_communication/Mmahmed1_Peer_Review?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_peer_review


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Elephant communication

Evaluate the drafted changes
The current article illustrates the Communication system in the Elephant. Overall the information presented here is relevant and interesting. However, an improvement could be achieved by adding some details and points.

1- It is clear that the authors did not include a lead section (it is too short), so it is reasonable to include more details relevant to this topic in a concise and comprehensive manner.

2- It seems also that the author did not cover the chemical signaling molecules responsible for the communication between elephants.

3- Article titles are not indicative. They are not well describing the intended reasons to be explained under these subheadings. So, I strongly recommend giving these titles more clarification to be easy for the readers.

Responding to peer review
Thank you, Mohammed, for your review. I am indeed planning to expand the lead section as it is very short, like you say. Which article titles are you referring to in your third point? The ones in the existing article or the ones I suggested ("Tactile communication" and "Semiochemical communication")? Best Kratinaha (talk) 19:32, 13 October 2022 (UTC)

The second round of peer review
The revised article has an improvement and looks better after the first round. However, I have a few points to work on. 1- It is clear that the draft needs more details, especially under the listed titles (no much details)

2- References also need to be included in your topic (references do not cover the information you put in).

3- Could the author stress or expand a little on chemical signaling molecules responsible for the communication between elephants?

Thanks,