User:Ksaldan3/Old Kiyyangan Village, Philippines/Ibell3772 Peer Review

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ksaldan3


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 * User:Ksaldan3/Old Kiyyangan Village, Philippines


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Evaluate the drafted changes
The lead of this article gives a good overview of the site, is concise, and has a good introductory sentence. I think it might be good to add another sentence that goes over some of the significant features of the site that are discussed in the body of the article.

The content in the article is all relevant and up to date. The tone of it seems pretty neutral, and it doesn't really favor any particular viewpoints that I can tell. The afterlife section seems a little tied to one article's perspective, but there might not be other research on that topic.

Claims in the article are all backed up by sources, though the citations are all at the end of a full paragraph, which is probably okay but I'm not sure. The sources are all current and accurate to the claims in the article, and all of the links work.

The article is well written and easy to follow, and there aren't a lot of grammatical errors. The structure of the article could be improved - it would be helpful to have a full introductory section on the history of the site and the culture, and it might be good to reorganize the sections so that the more important topics that readers need for background info are closer to top. The "burial orientation" and "beliefs in afterlife" sections could probably be condensed into one "burial practices" section as well.

The article has more than three sources, and the sources are a good representation of the topic. It doesn't have any links to other articles yet, so those could maybe be added.

Overall, I think the article has strong sections on specific topics, like social structure and beliefs in afterlife. I think that as well as expanding those sections it might be good to add some more substantial intro sections on the site and the culture, because I feel like there isn't very much context for someone who isn't familiar with the topic.