User:Ksaldan3/Old Kiyyangan Village, Philippines/MKnightingale Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Ksaldan3, Eriebe2


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Ksaldan3/Old_Kiyyangan_Village%2C_Philippines?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * User:Ksaldan3/Old Kiyyangan Village, Philippines

Evaluate the drafted changes
Peer Review: Old Kiyyangan Village, Philippines

No Lead: Currently there is no Lead for the article. A paragraph or two summarizing the site and its significance is needed for this.

The article body: There are so far clear and separate sections. What has been written so far in each section is clear and distinct from the other sections. I would put the “Burial Orientation” and “Beliefs in Afterlife” sections at the end though. I’ve noticed that those kinds of topics usually tend to be placed towards the end of Wikipedia articles.

There can be some improvement on lengthening some of the already established sections, and once the other sections have been added to, it will give the article a more clear and well-rounded picture of the site. Based on the titles you have so far, and the resources already listed, it seems there is still more to add. Obviously this is still early on in the creation process, but what exists so far seems like a good start. Any conclusions reached seem to be backed up by sources. Phrases like “There is evidence to suggest” and “the study concluded” along with the respective citations indicate that. A neutral tone is also consistent throughout.

Five sources is a great start. And they are all recent, with the oldest one being from 2017, so the information is most likely up-to-date. Most sources do come from the same publication: Philippine Quarterly of Culture and Society. However, it does seem to be a reliable source (it's impact factor is over 3). This has established some notability. Currently, there are no links to other Wikipedia articles to make it more discoverable. I would keep that in mind with any future edits. The addition of pictures, if possible, would also add to the article greatly.