User:Ksaldan3/Old Kiyyangan Village, Philippines/Westontengan1 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Ksaldan3/Old_Kiyyangan_Village%2C_Philippines/Westontengan1_Peer_Review?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_peer_review


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
The lead on the Wikipedia article gave me a good sense of what country we are dealing with and specifically what people or people occupied this ancient city which was explained in the lead paragraph. Also, the lead is a hook for the reader because this city was burned by imperial conquerors about 100 years ago and this makes me want to read more about it. The lead in this article does not seem to be the most important information and I think the most important information is in the Beliefs in Afterlife part. The information that is currently on the page provides a clear structure but I would like to know some of the datings on some of the grave goods found because the only dates were in the lead of the article. I feel like a lot of importance was placed on the grave goods section and I can see that in the length and detail of the writing but I think your other sections should match in length and detail to provide the reader with a consistent flow of information in each section. The article does not contain obvious signs of bias and does not make claims on behalf of unnamed people. Entire sections seemed to be cited by different sources and nothing indicates to me that this article was analyzed using one or two sources.