User:Ksomo/The wandering earth/Yuwei19 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Erik Yitian Ma, Ksomo, Gywlala


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Ksomo/The_wandering_earth?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * The Wandering Earth

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead: No changes yet. Current article's lead section seems to reflect the subject matter adequately, doesn't seem too long or too short.

Content: Additions include "National feelings in The Wandering Earth", "Understanding of Chinese Nationalism"

I am interested in seeing a summary on the themes of nationalism in The Wandering Earth as my partner and I have been assessing the role of Chinese culture in Frant Gwo's directorial style in our own article. I think it is definitely a topic worth exploring.

The "National feelings in The Wandering Earth" section seems to be incomplete. At present, it contains a short summary of the premise of the movie, similar to the lead section of the article.

The "Understanding of Chinese Nationalism" section reads similarly to an analytic essay, not an unbiased presentation of information on the movie The Wandering Earth. Though the theme of nationalism may be relevant to The Wandering Earth, such themes should probably only be discussed at-length if there is a large bulk of academic literature that has singled out this specific movie for themes of nationalism. The points being made in this section seem to be argumentative interpretations, not objective summaries of other significant interpretations, which may not be appropriate for a Wikipedia article. If there are multiple sources interpreting themes of nationalism in The Wandering Earth, it would be more appropriate to outline their arguments in a summarized, brief way, rather than synthesize one's own arguments on the Wikipedia page.

There is also no need for a conclusion passage in the section, as there should be no 'points' being made.

Tone: The tone of the added sections does not feel impartial, but rather like they are arguments being presented in an essay. Words like "obviously" are used, sweeping statements are made about the feelings of many people without accompanying sources.

References and sources: One of the new sources is relevant to The Wandering Earth, but the other sources appear to be tangentially related to the movie at best and are used more as pieces of evidence to support the authors' interpretations of the nationalistic themes in the movie. The new sources are all fairly current, from 2019.

Organization: The new content is easy to read and understand.

Overall impressions: Though the analysis of the theme of nationalism in Chinese cinema and The Wandering Earth is impressive, Wikipedia is not really the place for our own personal interpretations of media - our job is mostly to summarize what others have said on the topic. It's better to add only contributions that would be important to a new reader's understanding of the topic. If a significant amount of the discussion of The Wandering Earth is based on its themes of nationalism, and there is sufficient academic literature or trusted media coverage of this, then the sections on nationalism in the movie can be centred around those sources instead of our own arguments. We are just providing objective information.

Still, I know that Frant Gwo has made statements in interviews about the impact of Chinese culture on his directorial work in The Wandering Earth, so I do think the section on nationalism is warranted, it just needs more relevant sources and a more impartial tone. The arguments are solid and compelling too, I'm just not sure they're necessary for a Wikipedia article.