User:Ktootch/Evaluate an Article

Which article are you evaluating?
Wildcat (Hersheypark)

Why you have chosen this article to evaluate?
I used to live in Hershey, PA and this was my favorite rollercoaster in the park. I figure have a bit insight on some matters.

Evaluate the article
The lead section is good with what information it chooses to include taking time to talk about all major sections of the article: construction, closing, characteristics, and ranking. It is a bit long for the overall length of the article. The content is up to date, mentioning the recent closure, but it is also lacking much depth. The three major sections each only have a paragraph or two at most. With the limited number of sections and their brevity, the reader is left with the feeling that the page is missing information. The closing section is mainly speculation on a possible redesign. Despite the numerous sources that support the speculation, this page should present facts that are rather than focus on what could be. There is no confirmation at this point of RMC rebuilding the ride, and so speculation should be left out of the article rather than give the reader expectation of the unknown.

The organization of the article is good, but the content is not well written. Paragraphs are brittle, quickly switching from one fact to the next without taking the time to make sure that reading is smooth. Overall the feel is that of a bag of bullet points rather than an article. There are also a large number of sources for this page despite it's short length.

Overall, the biggest improvements that could be made at this time would be rewriting to make paragraphs clear and concise rather than bullet points vaguely organized and the removal of speculation of the ride's potential rebuild. Additional items to look at are also consolidating sources or adding to the content.