User:Kuchar2/Language of mathematics/Camiadmire Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Kuchar2


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * I could not find it. I believe the edits were just posted to the talk page instead. Talk: Language of mathematics - Wikipedia


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Language of mathematics - Wikipedia (this is the one I used to create a peer review/evaluation)

Evaluate the drafted changes
Comments regarding original suggestions/edits made by Kuchar2

Areas of improvement

Organization Wise


 * Change the location of understanding mathematical text. This section appears to explain the background information needed to be able to understand the topic. As result, it should go first and be integrated within the definition paragraph.
 * Change the location of features. This section appears to discuss distinguishable characteristics related to mathematical language. Therefore, it should procced the understanding mathematical text section due to it being a extension of the topic.

Content Wise


 * Introduce additional perspectives on the topic. Williams is the only individual that is currently mentioned. This formulates a very limited, restricted, and single-minded view.
 * Find a clear focus. The article is currently confusing, hard to read, and contains lots of complex language. It would be more helpful if the information was broken down and interpreted further.

Grammer Wise


 * Add citations. There is a high volume of citations missing within the article. This makes it difficult to know where information is coming from. The article still sounded very rooted in the original research's language instead of being rooted in the meaning of the research.

Areas of strength


 * A definition is provided. Readers can gain an understanding of the topic before diving into the rest of the article.
 * Examples are provided. Readers can learn about what these specific aspects that are associated with the topic look like.
 * Additional reading. Readers have the opportunity to expand their knowledge and or learn more about the topic. Exploration and research are encouraged.