User:Kuklo018/Freddy McConnell/Paisleysierra Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Wentl015 Bistr012 Kuklo018


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Kuklo018/Freddy_McConnell?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
I think that the work on the article so far is very well written and Freddy's story is very interesting. I am not aware of how much of his life is publicized or even available to find information on, but I think if you can dive deeper into his "early life" and more into his education and career (if you can find the information) that would be very useful. We want to get to know this dude and understand his story so more defining details of him would definitely help paint the picture. You also describe him as someone who advocates for trans rights in the UK, maybe talk more about that, what he has done to advocate for their rights. The details of the court cases are very well written and give a fair amount of description. Overall it's a very great draft of your article.