User:Kumakaa/Panchayati Raj/Edwardmillet Peer Review

Peer review
This is where you will complete your peer review exercise. Please use the following template to fill out your review.

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing? Kumakaa
 * Link to draft you're reviewing: User:Kumakaa/Panchayati Raj

Lead
Guiding questions:


 * Has the Lead been updated to reflect the new content added by your peer?
 * No it has not
 * Does the Lead include an introductory sentence that concisely and clearly describes the article's topic?
 * Yes the lead does discuss what will be presented in the article. There is no addition though for this article and what it will add.
 * Does the Lead include a brief description of the article's major sections?
 * Yes
 * Does the Lead include information that is not present in the article?
 * No
 * Is the Lead concise or is it overly detailed?
 * The lead section is concise giving one a brief overview of what to expect within the article.

Content
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added relevant to the topic?
 * Yes very much so. it is important for the article to have up to date information on what is happening in India with the Panchayati Raj.
 * Is the content added up-to-date?
 * The content is up to date especially that which is being added will only improve the article.
 * Is there content that is missing or content that does not belong?
 * As far as I can tell there is no missing content

Tone and Balance
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added neutral?
 * For the most part the content is neutral. However, one could run into trouble with the last sentence in the article. It mentions that a study conducted states that a large body of men do not favor having women in the raj, while it may be true it is possible that could be hotly contested.
 * Are there any claims that appear heavily biased toward a particular position?
 * This is a tough subject to write on especially since there is so much opinion on this specific topic of women in the Panchayati Raj. I think it is possible to appear biased but I will say for the most part the article is just presenting the facts in the most neutral way possible. I would recommend going through it again and just double check wording and make sure readers will not misconstrued your words.
 * Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented?
 * No there are non that are over or underrepresented
 * Does the content added attempt to persuade the reader in favor of one position or away from another?
 * again I do not think there is any purposeful bias in this article but i do fear that it could come under debate because of how contested this issue is. But the article does its best and in my opinion presents the information in the most neutral way possible.

Sources and References
Guiding questions:


 * Is all new content backed up by a reliable secondary source of information?
 * Yes the content backed up by research and scholarly sources
 * Are the sources thorough - i.e. Do they reflect the available literature on the topic?
 * As far as i am aware the sources provided give an accurate account of the available literature on the topic.
 * Are the sources current?
 * All sources are current and the oldest one is from 2013.
 * Check a few links. Do they work?
 * Yes all of the links work

Organization
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added well-written - i.e. Is it concise, clear, and easy to read?
 * Yes the content is incredibly well written and presented in a fashion that intrigues the reader. I believe that it is an important to talk about and while it is difficult because this issue is one that has some contested views, it is well written and does its best at providing the subject in a neutral way.
 * Does the content added have any grammatical or spelling errors?
 * No.
 * Is the content added well-organized - i.e. broken down into sections that reflect the major points of the topic?
 * Yes the content is well organized and provides a lead into the rest of the article. Furthermore, the article feels like sort of a story and allows for the reader to make connections as the article continues.

Images and Media N/A
Guiding questions: If your peer added images or media


 * Does the article include images that enhance understanding of the topic?
 * Are images well-captioned?
 * Do all images adhere to Wikipedia's copyright regulations?
 * Are the images laid out in a visually appealing way?

For New Articles Only N/A
If the draft you're reviewing is a new article, consider the following in addition to the above.


 * Does the article meet Wikipedia's Notability requirements - i.e. Is the article supported by 2-3 reliable secondary sources independent of the subject?
 * How exhaustive is the list of sources? Does it accurately represent all available literature on the subject?
 * Does the article follow the patterns of other similar articles - i.e. contain any necessary infoboxes, section headings, and any other features contained within similar articles?
 * Does the article link to other articles so it is more discoverable?

Overall impressions
Guiding questions:


 * Has the content added improved the overall quality of the article - i.e. Is the article more complete?
 * The content added provides information of the Raj system in practice and how it actually plays out which is critical to understanding what it is and how it works.
 * What are the strengths of the content added?
 * The strength of the article is its ability to tie all aspects of the article together and provide the reader with a more detailed analysis of the system.
 * How can the content added be improved?
 * My only issue with this article is its final sentence and i feel that if it is to be kept it cannot be the end of the article and it must be phrased in a way that should be more neutral. The issue with having it as the ending sentence is that it can devalue the neutrality of the rest of the article.

Overall evaluation
My overall impression of the article is a very good one. I believe that this topic is important and that the author brings in relevant information that readers should be aware of. Furthermore, the article is designed in a way that is easy to follow and allows for the reader to make connections between different aspects of the article. The only thing that I would stress is the issue of the last sentence. It is important to discuss the issue that men are not comfortable with women serving and it should be brought up. However, I believe that it might devalue the rest of the article because you end on sort of a bombshell and tough point that some might find unflattering. I would suggest putting in the other side or adding a couple summation sentences so that you are not ending on that. Overall, I feel this will be a great addition to the page and wikipedia in general, nice job on putting all the information together and presenting a well balanced and informative article.