User:Kutiang/Traditional African masks/Madklutts Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Kutiang


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Kutiang/Traditional_African_masks?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Traditional African masks

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead:

I really like what you added to the opening section. The Lead was not very specific, so adding information about what sorts of ceremonies and rituals masks are involved in really helps with the understanding of the article. I also like that you added the information about women from specific cultures and how they used the masks. I think this was a good addition. One thing I did note is that later in the article some of the words like "weddings, funerals, and initiation rites" had linked Wiki pages but because you are adding them in up here, make sure to link them up here rather than later in the article.

History:

I think that this section was a good addition and something that the original article was kind of missing. On the Njoku quote, is that quote too long? I know that there are some rules about length and a preference for restating rather than quoting so that is something to consider, though I think either way it looks fine.

Transcendence:

Is this going to be part of the history section? I am a little confused where this fits into the article (not the content, just more physically in the article where are you putting it?)

While I like how you reworded and shortened some other the sections in this, I think that including what cults the Awa, Bini, and Lebe are back in might be useful. I do like that you linked to these pages though. Also is there any reason that the kple kple mask is "less prestigious?" Does the source explain why or is it because it is unadorned?

Overall, I think that you have added a lot of valuable information and reworded places that were too long. Also really good job on adding in linked Wiki pages. I have not done that on my page yet lol.