User:Kwinkler23/Evaluate an Article

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Reginaldo degli Scrovegni

Why you have chosen this article to evaluate?
I chose this article to evaluate because Reginaldo is the only usurer that speaks to Dante and through this shows Dante's characterization of their sin. Because he is the solo usurer that speaks its important that people can look him up and see a comprehensive summary of him as a character and person to be the representation of this sin in Inferno. My initial impression of this article was that it was kind of all over the place, and clunky, especially with the huge chunk of cited text.

Evaluate the article
The lead section is overall well done, I would, however add on to the fact that Reginaldo was known as usurer by bringing up his appearance in Dante's Inferno in the intro, as It is mostly what the rest of the article talks about.

This articles structure is something I would change. I would add a 'general info' section before the 'place in Dante's Inferno Section' which would go more into detail about his life and death. Adding that its speculated that his son commissioned the Scrovegni Chapel to attempt to make up for his father's reputation as a user. I would also add to emphasize how disliked he was, that upon his death his house was destroyed by an angry mob. In the 'Place in Dante's Inferno Section' I would first state that he is introduced in canto XVII and emphasize that he is in the third and final ring of the seventh circle which specifically punishes violence against god, before it just says 7th circle which punishes violence. when explaining why being a usurer is a crime against god I would add art/nature and add Virgil's explanation quote stating. "'The usurer, who takes another path, scorns nature in herself and in her follower, and elsewhere sets his hopes.'" I would also add that his name is never stated and when describing the inference of the coat of arms I would rephrase that sentence to sound more professional. overall i think just the addition of a few things and rephrasing of some sentences to sound more scholarly would help this section out immensely.

I think the block quote of relevant lines from the Inferno could be halved as how Dante first meets Reginaldo is already explained in the previous paragraph. I would start the quote at line 55-75. Formatting wise i think the parenthesis explaining the intro of Reginaldo based off his coat of arms is distracting from the text so I would keep the description bolded and add an asterix with a note at the bottom.

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As far as the talk page goes there wasn't a lot of discussion and edits, most of the most recent edits were bots and a majority of edits were made by one man. There aren't any images and i would try to find at least one.

Overall this article is pretty sparse and could be improved upon with some extra details and organization of the quotes. The main focus of this article is Reginaldo's appearance in the inferno so his lead section should include that and other info of him as a person outside of Dante's account would be helpful. The citations here are similar to what i had, which are translator's notes and the main sourced text. for some reason a Giotto documentary is cited, I believe for the information of Reginaldo's son's participation in the building of the Scrovegni Chapel. It seems like that source is out of place. This article is currently has not been assessed by wikipedia and I would give it the assessment of a "start" article because it is a good start but an average reader would feel lost in the long quotes, and certain vague descriptions. The citations as well are only evident at the bottom and there are no in text citations.